Friday, January 30, 2015

Allusion Poem: Draft

Braiding my brown hair into two piggy tails
Putting on my blue checkered dress
Looking over the rainbow
Where blue birds fly
Following the road will lead me to success
Following the road will help me find friendship
Taking my first step on my journey

My slippers shine bright on a rainy day
When the skies is gray my slippers turn red
Can’t wait to start this journey, but not myself
Remembering what great times we have together as a family
But not knowing when we can see each other once again

Walking down the road, seeing farm for miles
No one in sight, no friends I see, no
Thinking about what the great things will come
In my mind wanting to
Seeing my family glowing in green, telling me to come to them
Knowing that they are so far away

Giving people a helping hand, when people are at there lowest point
My friends had no brain, no heart, and no courage to do anything in the world
Taking my friends to somewhere where their dreams can come true
A place where they can get a brain, a heart, and courage
But continuing to get home sick and wanting to be with my family once again

I click the heels of my slippers three times 
 There’s no place like home, There’s no place like home
Remembering what great times we have together as a family
Laughing, crying, smiling, being together once again
Unbraiding my braids after a long and stressful journey

And I can’t wait for the next journey to come

2 comments:

  1. It's a good start, I would add a little more things about you now or maybe a little what you've been through.

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  2. I feel like you were trying to push Dorothy's story too much, remember it's supposed to be about you.

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