University of Southern
California Prompt:
Describe the world you
come from for example, your family, community or school and tell us how your
world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
I wish my world were like T.V show life.
Where I win prom queen, I date the most popular football guy and get to be the
captain of the cheerleading squad. Plus I would be a genius student who takes all A.P and honors
classes, gets pick to be the smartest in the class and is the president of the
school. My world is nothing compared to what I see on T.V. I may look like just
a regular standard student who participates in school sports, activities and
classes. Have friends to hang with, eat lunch with, and talk with. Plus having
a supportive family. But in my eyes my world is filled with highs and lows, laughter,
stress, procrastination, and love. My world started off small only knowing
family and close family friends, but now my world has grown into something that
can’t be stopped. I’m like a sponge soaking up everything around me. The
smells, tastes, sights, and sounds. My world is not just a simple equation it’s
more like a highly complex equation that is hard to figure out. The world is made up of living
organisms and complex atoms. What is my world made up of you ask? My world is
made up of highs and lows, laughter, stress, procrastination, and love.
Love is what gives me hope that I will succeed.
Family and friends to me is the definition of love. Giving me support to go
through my day hoping something good comes out of it. Family is the structure and foundation of my world. Love doesn’t
always have to be for your family. I feel that I love my friends and how much
they do for me. Keeping me on my toes and helping me along the way. Stress what causes me to
flip out and become angry at everything. Can’t control my emotions and feeling
inside. Having that feeling inside that my parents are pushing me so hard.
Needing a break my talking to my closest friends. Doesn’t matter boy or girl as
long as they understand me. Without stress, my world would be too perfect.
Having an unstable world gives me a chance to have challenges in life. To test
my boundaries with boys, school, and the outside world. Seeing what I can do
under pressure and see what the result is. Learning from my mistakes to clam my
stress levels down. Love and stress a perfect combination and sweet and spicy
all into one are completing 2/5 of my world.
Procrastination
a habit of mine when doing homework. Thinking, yeah I have lots of time. Then
suddenly the clock strikes 9, my bedtime. Falling asleep thinking about oh I
shouldn’t have gone to soccer practice, I wish I did it sooner. All these
thoughts juggling in my brain how to get everything done but still put out
quality work. Completing what I can before I get in trouble. When getting to
school realizing that all my friends didn’t finish the assignment to gives me a
sense of relief. Laughing and hoping we don’t have a pop quiz. Laughter is what gets me
through the day. Giving me a chuckle or something to talk about on and on and
on. Having something that reminds me not to stress out. To enjoy life now
because you never know when it can be taken away from you. Wanting to life my
high school life as the best possible is hard when focusing on school. Procrastination
and stress a horrible combination, but when mixed perfectly then it becomes
something that works in harmony completing 2/5 of my world.
Highs and lows what pushes me to become better each
day. Seeing what others can do pushes me to better than I am.
Always wanting an A on every test but them getting back
your test scores you got a D. Knowing that the next test I take I will study
extra hard to earn that A. When I’m at my highest, I’m excited and cheerful
then some how in a second I get at my lowest point. Knowing that my family is
trying all they can to help me but I think it’s me who is the problem. Trying
to fix out the bugs so I don’t have these rollercoaster moments. Most of my
highs and lows come from soccer. Soccer teaches so much sometimes something’s
my parents can’t teach me. Seeing my friends all getting down their ankle
juggling gets me really upset. I feel that I hit rock bottom that I’m not
trying hard enough. I keep practicing and practicing then I finally can do at
least five. Now I feel accomplished even though it is only five I know I just
have to practice harder if I want to juggle more. Having rollercoaster’s moments help me change my attitude towards.
Finally completing the 1/5 of my world.
Dreaming and believing are two different things. When
dreaming I’m thinking about impossible things that couldn’t happen. When
believing it takes it to a whole new level. Seeing with my imagination about
what is to come with my family, friends, boys, and school. My aspiration in
life was always to care for people. My mom said “It was in my nature”. When I
was 4 years I always wanted to make my little sister happy. My sister would
always be upset because she couldn’t do things I could. I tried my best to make
her feel special by playing dress up with her. It was always hard because there
was a two-year difference. Till this day I always wanted to make people feel
better. If someone is not happy then I’m not happy. That’s why I want to peruse
a job in the health care field because I enjoy seeing people feel better. Having
these highs and lows, laughter, stress,
procrastination and love changed my view on life. Seeing problems in a new
perspective really helps me understand my choices affect people. Figuring out
what dreams and aspirations easy because my world has shown my right pathway. My world is now complete for
now, until I grow then my world grows. That means more elements come into play
to make me the person that I will become in the future. My world is nothing
like a T.V show world but in my T.V show it is 100% complete for now.
Great essay! The paragraphs that talk about the things that effects your world, you should start it of with something a little more creative.
ReplyDeleteGreat start!! Your paragraphs seem a little long maybe shorten them a little. Other than that good job
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ReplyDeleteGreat job on getting your thoughts and ideas into your draft. Also, good job on relating your world to how it helped shape your dreams and aspirations. The only suggestion I have is to clean up your body paragraphs :)
ReplyDeletems(3-) YOU HAVE A LOT OF "FLUFF" MEANING THERE IS A LOT OF STUFF THAT YOU DISCUSS THAT DOESN'T DIRECTLY SHOW WHAT KIND OF PERSON YOU ARE (ESPECIALLY THE FIRST TWO PARAGRAPHS). REMEMBER THE ESSAY NEEDS TO BE ABOUT YOU, GET TO THE POINT AND THEN BE CREATIVE ABOUT THINGS THAT ARE DIRECTLY ABOUT YOU.
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