I am a macaron
colorful
tasty
cute
wondering if your going to give me the boot
knowing that it needs to be handled with
care
having a strong yet fragile shell
but
when broken
sensitive and insecure
inside of me a soft spot
so nice and chewy
it's hard to find the right dot
each macaron so delicate like a cloud
so fun and friendly
bubbly inside
and can't wait to be mines
quiet at first
soft and shy
but
when in your mouth
so sweet and kind
it's just pure honestly
there is nothing to hide
I am a macaron the purest of it's kind
Nice poem! I like how it is very creative and there was good word choice. You can change the line "wondering if your going to give me the boot" because it was hard to understand. You can also fix the "your" to a "you're".
ReplyDeleteHEY GIRL HEEEEEEY, i love your poem it makes me crave macaroon my the second! whoop whooooop
ReplyDeleteHi Erin! I like how your poem is structured, especially the words that describe yourself, very accurate. You could add punctuation though.
ReplyDeletegreat start. my suggestion, you need to make a stronger connection to the macaroon and talk about yourself. because if you read your poem is sounds like you are literally talking about a macaroon because there is no personal story from your side. add reason as to why you are those things with you own stories and not just talk about the macaroon. MS(3-)
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